DOES THIS CHARGE YOU?

[betterunsaid]

This was part of a pitch for Date seed Coffee done sometime in June.
We are still waiting for the results.

[TruthHurts]

sorry don't like it. first of all you are showing someone running on my coffee, u don't do that with food, second of all the art sucks....the foam on the side looks like the wart on a toad.

[shantyarow]

Yope, but nope I don't like it either. The thought is hackeneyed and the execution (which could have saved it) makes it worse.

[second_creator]

HEY BUDDY NOT BAD I LYKED THE IDEA

[FC]

agreed, good idea screwed by bad execution....looks like a rough ad...

[bhavya]

wat is the idea pray do tell

[shantyarow]

Bhavs, I've supped and quaffed a lot of coffees in the interim. Still can't figure out what the idea was. No issues, more coffee's on the way.

[betterunsaid]

COFFEE CHARGES YOU.

[DesiPimp]

coffee charges u is pretty good as a thot but i would have done a different execeution.

[shantyarow]

BUS, I would have never known if you hadn't revealed that coffee is supposed to be a stimulant that awakens one's senses.
On a less sarcastic note, the proposition is very generic and very cliched. You need to devise a new spin on coffee.

Coffee and sex - Done, Coffee and a brighter start to the day/better end to the night - Done, Coffee as a metaphor for fresher thinking or better ideas - Done, Coffee and Charging in any form - Done. Etc, etc.

These are the days of Red Bull my friend. And anabolic steroids. Coffee needs to be given a new pair of wings (sorry Red Bull).

Don't have any solutions at the moment, but give me some more caffeine in my blood stream and maybe Eureka will follow.

[betterunsaid]

Cutty sark. That's biting.

Is sarcasm called for?

[shantyarow]

If sarcasm can be a route to constructive criticism, so be it.

Just as a thought, is there anything special about 'date seed coffee'? I mean does that ingredient have something which other coffee seeds don't?

Could be the seed to a new spin?

[Payal]

shanty, lets see your creative idea on this. just curious, i love the way u write, will be good to see another angle to it.

[Payal]

and guys, lets respect others. creativity is so personal and if u attack the idea u could attack the person unknowigly.

[shantyarow]

Payal, sometimes criticism is the best form of respect, just as imitation is the sincerest form of flattery. I have no disrepect towards this ad or betterunsaid, I am just trying to see if a better direction can be arrived at.

Having said that, yes, thanks for liking my style of writing. Quite honestly, I have not had the time to think of a new angle and somehow don't even feel the inclination. But if something pops out, shall definitely give a shout.

Btw, I love your avatar.

Cheers, Shanty